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First I wanna say is that I’m a fan of the work that I’ve read of yours so far. And that I am no critic I am just a guy that reads six stories on the website and it has eternal writers block myself.
That being said I like the set up for Geo and his background to a certain point although he did seem a little gullible about how much porn in the book he read and then didn’t realize how much he would be desirable he’d be and up with the length of his equipment.
Then his sister being protective of him was one thing but then pretty much jumping his bones of the first Ativan was a warning flag to me. But after she enacted her playing with the twins he went from sort of geeky fun brother character to a bullying asshole in the span of a blink.
When he told the twins and then eventually his sister that he was going to breed them that kind of took me out of the story because it didn’t seem to jive with his attitude before him and his sister had sex.
He just didn’t read is this kind of automatically alpha male type jerk who was more of a bully then the people that bully him. And I have a deep part of me as a person who grew up as a good person myself for what he was dealing with an economy that took me out of the story a great deal when he turned into one.
Now the whole bringing these three girls thing also seems a little out of the blue and kind of the antithesis of a teenage boy. Why would any teenager even if they do have a BBC. Big brother cock, want to be saddled with two children by two girls who started off the story hating him and one by his own sister that just stretches believability even for a silly sex story.
And now positive things descriptions of your sex acts are very well done taking you to the count the logistics of someone having a Lexington Steele size dick. Geo started off as a guy I can see myself hanging out with what he turned into in Chapter 2 just kind of rub me the wrong way.
The mom she’s all right milf be Milfing. And the twins dad he seems all right to.
Overall I’m liking the story and I’m hoping things improve in the next few chapters but I’m gonna keep reading your work and I want nothing more than you continue to put these sex stories out for us horn dogs to read.

Resistance is obedience and obedience is pleasure!
Resistance is obedience and obedience is pleasure!
Resistance is obedience and obedience is pleasure!
OMG im awake and my penis is throbbing!

GOD IS DEAD
GOD IS DEAD
GOD IS DEAD
GOD IS DEAD
GOD IS DEAD

The story is what is important and it is great, what is not so important is a few typos!!

This is so perfect.... Pace is great, tension is great, characterization is great. Love it!